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2つの文書を連結させるカンマとandの使い方(1)

 

長い文書をつなげるカンマとandの使用には注意が必要です。

 

以下ネイティブからのアドバイスです。

 

Long sentences I: Connecting two sentences with a comma and ‘and’

 

Hello,

 

The sentence pattern for connecting two sentences using a comma and ‘and’ is fairly simple.

 

We start with two sentences:

 

I went to Tokyo.
I ate sushi.

 

We join them together with a comma and ‘and.’

 

I went to Tokyo, and I ate sushi.

 

However, the sentence becomes more complicated as it grows longer:

 

I went to Tokyo by train, and I ate sushi for lunch.

 

And longer:

 

I went 1,100 km to Tokyo by train, and I ate sushi for lunch at a little restaurant.

 

And longer:

 

I went 1,100 km from far away Hokkaido to Tokyo by train, and I ate sushi for lunch at a little restaurant in the Ginza.

 

And longer:

 

I went 1,100 km from far away Hokkaido to Tokyo by train last week, and I ate sushi for lunch at a little restaurant in the Ginza that serves those live shrimp.

 

And longer:

 

I went 1,100 km from far away Hokkaido to Tokyo last week by train, a ride that started with a local train and ended on a bullet train, and I ate sushi for lunch at a little restaurant in the Ginza that serves those live shrimp where they take the shrimp out of the tank in front of you, chop their heads off, and serve them while they are still wiggling.

 

That is quite a sentence, isn’t it. When I added more information in the last revision, I needed to move some of the information so it would still read smoothly.

 

Maybe we should divide it in two. There is just too much information in there for two sentences. How is this?

 

I went 1,100 km from far away Hokkaido to Tokyo last week by train, a ride that started with a local train and ended on a bullet train. I ate sushi for lunch at a little restaurant in the Ginza that serves those live shrimp where they take the shrimp out of the tank in front of you, chop their heads off, and serve them while they are still wiggling.

 

While there is no rule regarding word limitations for sentences, any time that a sentence goes over 30 words is probably a good time to check the sentence carefully or divide it in two or more sentences.

 

Remember that these sentences have fairly simple content. More complicated content will make the sentences even more difficult to understand.

 

Be careful when you write long sentences and check them carefully.

 

Best,

 

 

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